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To begin with, everyone might agree with the idea that the period of elementary school is essential time to decide their whole education life. By helping elementary students, university students can feel a sense of accomplishment. To be specific, in the future, young students will become core member to support our world, so it is important to help them when they need. My personal experience is a (관사 필요) good example of this, I taught a young student (단수) five (아라비아 숫자 사용을 지양해주세요.) years ago. He did (시제 -> 과거 시제) not know how to study at first, but after knew studying methods. His scores were jumped from bottom to top. Now, he is a top high school student. Through this, I satisfied myself and felt a sense of accomplishment.
On top of that, university students can learn teaching methods by helping elementary students. What it means is (be동사 필요) that university students are required to have a wide aspect of knowledge rather than
To sum up, (대소문자 구분) there are a lot of advantages to help elementary students for university students. They can satisfy themselves and enhance their teaching methods by teaching elementary students. It is important for university students to have a chance to take two virtues with just one behavior. In this regard, I firmly believe that it is the best choice to help elementary students with their studies.
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1. 철자 오류가 잦은 편입니다. 심한 감점의 요인이 될 수 있으니, 에세이 작성을 마치시고 꼼꼼히 검토해주세요.
+) 단어를 외우실 때 스펠링을 집중적으로 외워주세요.
2. 사소한 문법 오류가 잦은 편입니다. proof-reading을 꼼꼼하게 해주세요.
3. 두 번째 문단에서 teaching methods를 아는 것과 그들의 학점이 어떤 상관관계를 가지고 있는지 명확하지 않습니다.
조금 더 토픽에 초점을 맞추어 주세요.
teaching methods를 아는 것이 어디에 도움이 되는지 잘 생각해보시면 좋을 것 같습니다.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*