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People have different preferences where to use when using their money if they luckily get the amount of money. Some
may expedite it to buy a precious gem making them beautiful and others may use
it to have an extravagant meal that they would never have a chance to eat
without the sudden fortune. However, I would spend my money on a pair of
concert tickets because I think it has more advantages than the other options.
To begin with,
to experience a concert helps you relax, which lasts lasting a comparably longer in one's memory long period of your
life. Many people these days suffer mostly from psychological factors rather
than physical factors. (Clearly explain about this point) Unlike meals that are a pleasure for your body, visiting a concert
is something evokes your psychological excitement. It could reduce the pressure
that today's people struggle with, providing an opportunity to resolve all of the distressful apprehensions.
On top of that, you
could share your gift with your beloved partner. Buying a piece of jewelry could
give you temporary satisfaction, but it is inferior to (Somewhat strong voice) that kind of happiness
that could be gained from sharing a meaningful moment. You could not only enjoy
the concert of your favorite performer but also could have a delightful time
with someone important to you. It could be parents, friends, or the companion
of your whole life. As the famous adage goes, to distribute what is yours possesses doubles overall happiness.
To sum up, as you buy a couple of tickets and use it with someone, you could recover your state
of mind and make unforgettable memory accompanying a person who makes you happy.
In this regard, I assure you to spend money that you have been given as a gift on a
pair of concert tickets.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 3 | 3
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- 다양하고 어느정도 높은 수준의 단어활용이 좋은 편입니다.
- 다만 예제가 general 한 편이기 때문에 어떠한 concert가 그러한 효과를 주었는지 (experience/entertainment news/interview) 등을 제시할 수 있도록 해주세요.
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