▶ Your Answer : There might be some people who believe that
young people should select a different career for themselves than a job in the
same field as their parents. However, I personally disagree with the above idea
for the two reasons. First, parents can give the most helpful answer to their
children. Second, it can be a way to save time.
To begin with, young people can receive the
most helpful answer from their parents. Parents are wise enough to offer
sincere advice because they have had enough experience in almost every issue in
this world. Not only that, they are the ones who care most about their children
so they will obviously do their best to help them out. So it is easy for young people to get
information by working in the same field as their parents. According to a
recent survey done by public institute, 80 percent of the respondents said that
it is better to work in the same field as their parents because their parents
always give a great advice.
On top of that, it can save time when individuals to work in
the same field as their parents. There is an old saying, “time is gold.” This
proverb emphasizes the value of time, and this cannot be truer more true in modern
society. We are living a busy and hectic life,lives, so saving time means that we can
do a lot more things later. I will provide an example of my friend, Kevin, whom
I have known since elementary school. He used to spend a lot of time to think
thinking about what he really wants wanted to do. However, one day, he decided to choose a job in the
same felid field as their his parents. This decision changed his life for the better because he
could save his time and used use that extra time is for something else.
In conclusion, young people can receive a
good advice for from their parents and save time by working in the same fields as their parents. Taking all of these reasons into
consideration, we should agree with the idea that a job in the same field as
their parents is better to select.
[Score]
24-25
[Feedback]
- 학생의 주장이 매우 명확했고 예시로 잘 support를 해주셨습니다.
- 다만, 더 complex한 예시를 들어주면 점수가 더 높게 나올 거 같아요. Ex. about family owned business --> more skills learned from their parents/parents' know-how, family secret recipe. 그래서 더 좋다.
- 더 자세히 써주세요. 제가 학생의 문장에 더 쓴거를 보고 더 디테일 하게 써주세요.
-문법에는 특별히 오류가 많지는 않았습니다.
수고하셨습니다~ |