Some
people may think that making a sudden decision on something is not a bad option for them. However,
in my case, making a quick decision without thinking enough all of a sudden is likely to can lead to the conclude wrong conclusion and
not to solve problems since there are more chances that a person will make a mistake if he or she does not think enough.
To
begin with, hasty decisions often lead to more mistakes. have most likelihood of mistaking. In fact, to
decide on an important issue without carefully thinking and time-consumed caring is not suitable and
even gives big disadvantages. For
example, three year ago, I had to deal with the big project. However, I was really busy with my excessive tasks at that time; so, I did not have enough time. As a result,
I had no choice but to conclude on my project quickly. After a few days, my boss was angry about
my decision and he informed that my company got a big damage financially. After
that, I learn that I have to carefully think when I cope with a big problem. (예시의 기본적 요소는 양호하나 앞서 충분히 사고하지 않음으로 인해 실수를 많이 만드는 것에 대한 부연 설명을 적어주세요: 예) 충분히 답에 대해 고민하지 않을 경우 늘 예기치 못한 변수에 대비할 수 없게 된다 등)
On top of that, deeply thinking is helpful for improving one's ability of thinking
and solving problems. To be specific, the process of careful thinking is
meaningful because people can collect and integrate information by spending enough time thinking about the topic. (어떤 경위를 통해 사람들이 다음과 같이 정보를 수집할 수 있는지 작성해주세요) By this
process, people develop their skills on how to handle the problem they face. I will talk about famous
person’s experience to illustrate this point. I read the article from 'Times magazine' concerning Bill
gates, the CEO of Microsoft, when he faced a big challenge he never decided on
impulse. He always asked co-workers and experts in this problem. Therefore, he was able to (과거에 일어났던 일) have a big success and a great achievement. All the time, He has said to his employees that always deeply thinking and making a decision cautiously. (올바른 소유격 구분 해 주세요)
To sum up, deciding one's stance on a topic hastily is not beneficial
for solving problems and could create a harmful loss. In contrast, determining on matters discreetly has a lot of advantage such as enhancing thinking ability and
solving ability. In this regard, I firmly believe that hasty decisions are not the right ones.
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