▶ Your Answer :
Although there is no complete consensus that has been
reached on this topic, yet I would like to take a stance with one of the given
plans that providing training for every teacher online and, let them study
individually. In order to substantiate my central focal points, I will provide
specific reasons and explore the given topic in great detail in this essay.
To begin with, I firmly believe that it would be more effective to provide
training for teachers online, and let them study individually. This is because,
it doesn’t negatively influence teachers’ own classes, giving individual tasks
which are really helpful and effective for their
classes and effective. Opponents of my perspective claim that it would
be better to improve teaching that train by
training good teachers first, and let them teach the other
teachers. Proponents of this view raise several points
as the rationales for their argument and their argument might have some
validity. But after closer look, there exists an abundance of examples that calling
call into question what they claim. Among such
examples, an instance that I am going to describe here can elucidate their
incorrect viewpoint. When I was a middle school student, my school teachers had
an opportunity to take a ‘teacher training course’ which was provided by the
government. Five of them went to take the course, leaving their classes to other
teachers from the other schools. It might have had
some positive effects, however, as far as I was concerned, it was really not
effective. This is because, while the teachers were trained, the students in
their classes couldn’t get an enough education from the other
teachers. This validates my earlier contention that since it doesn’t affect
classes, it is more effective to train teachers online.
The account of mine that I illustrated above is not the only evidence to
support my view. A recent survey conducted by one of the leading educational
consulting firms in Korea endorsed my opinion when the respondents were asked
whether they are sided with the argument that it is more effective to
give teachers training online to improve their teaching or not. A leading
education expert claims claimed that
teachers can individually learn kind of teaching skills or how to
educate their students better by following online guidelines with online materials. The expert also states
stated that it doesn’t have any benefit for the
teachers, if they do not get absolute points of education that is provided by
either teachers or online. In addition, it is really important to practice and
study individually, and make whatever they learned into their own. He also
asserts that teachers can put what they learned into practice, learning and
studying training course online and not missing any class.
In conclusion, in spite of the fact that there would be some opinions that
select like selecting a group of good
teachers and training them first, and let them
teach the other teachers in their school, taking into account all the
factors that I described above, we may reach to the conclusion that it
will be more effective to provide training for teachers online, and let them
study individually.
Writing
0-30 Score Scale |
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Comment: |
잘 쓰셨어요. 포인트를 잘 잡고
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