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The lecturer is arguing that coal industry has several problems making serious issues; she (lecturer 성별) believes that the industry will not maintain its current position in the future. This statement contradicts to the reading passage's claim that there are some merits in coal industry which makes the industry being more useful in the future. First of all, the lecturer says that mining coal is pretty much complicated process. Actually, she says that the deposit of coal is limited and almost in extinction. For this reason, it is necessary to dig much deeper to approach to the coal. This means the coal industry needs much more sophisticated technology and high skills. This casts doubt on the reading passage's claim that coal is easy to mine. On top of that, the lecturer also contends that transportation of coal demands a lot of money. That is, Coals needs to be transported by big vehicles such as truck or train because the coal is very heavy and has bulky size; this makes the cost to deliver coal pretty expensive. This refutes the reading passage's claim that coal is cheap to transport.
Finally, the lecturer asserts that the statement in the reading passage about that the coal industry will make making a lot of employment opportunities possibilities is not true. She mentions that there have been a movement to lower the cost of labor saving technique. In particular, she says that the number of employment of director of the coal industry is in decrease, and this decline will last in the future. This counters the reading passage's claim that the coal industry helps to create more jobs for workers.
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
ADDRESSING TOPIC
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ORGANIZATION
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PROGRESSION AND COHERENCE
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LANGUAGE USE
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GRAMMAR
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GOOD
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GOOD
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FAIR
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GOOD
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FAIR
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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