▶ Your Answer : The lecturer argues that there are several evidences that large civilization was existed in Amazon. This casts doubt on the reading passage's claim that the evidence supporting the existence of large civilization in Amazon is not available. 두 지문의 입장을 분명히 해주세요. 지금은 둘 다 아마존에 large civilization이 있었다는 주장으로 해석됩니다.
First, the speaker says that recently satellite images have shown that there were canals and roads which made mad Amazon able to form advanced civilization, even if there was were dense vegetation. This contradicts the reading passage's claim that it was not likely to have advanced civilization in Amazon due to its high concentrated vegetation.
Next, the lecturer contends that there was poetry found in Amazon which was very sophisticated. For example, an ceramic poetry found in amazon is believed to be used in only highly advanced civilization. This challenges the reading passage's claim that archaeologists have not discovered any artifacts with high sophistication. artifacts라는 표현을 봐서는 poetry가 아니라 pottery가 맞을 것 같은데, 지문 다시 확인해주세요.
Finally, the lecturer maintains that the area of Amazon was so vast that most of the part was undiscovered until the discovery discover of civilization by French explorers. detail 보완이 좀 더 필요할 것 같습니다. French explorers의 발견만으로는 부족하다, 그 외에 더 찾아봐야한다, 하는 식의 주장이 제시되어야 할 것 같은데 이 부분도 지문 한 번 더 체크해주시면 좋을 것 같아요. This refutes the reading passage's claim that the European explorers have found nothing more than scattered tribes in rudimentary settlements.
Comment : 두 지문이 다루는 주제가 명확하고 각 본론에서도 입장이 잘 드러나지만, detail부분에서 명확하지 않은 부분들이 감점요인이 될 것 같아요. 지문을 한 번 더 확인하면서 reading의 어떤 주장에 lecture가 어떤 근거로 반박하는지를 하나씩 체크해서 수정&보완해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 문장에서도 수량표현이나 수동/능동 표현 등 오류가 있는 편이니 꼼꼼하게 검토해주세요. 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 3/5 A response at this level contains some important information from the lecture and conveys some relevant connection to the reading, but it is marked by one or more of the following : - Although the overall response is definitely oriented to the task, it conveys only vague, global, unclear, or somewhat imprecise connection of the points made in the lecture to points made in the reading. - The response may omit one major key point made in the lecture. - Some key points made in the lecture or the reading, or connections between the two, may be incomplete, inaccurate, or imprecise. - Errors of usage and/or grammar may be more frequent or may result in noticeably vague expressions or obscured meanings in conveying ideas and connections. |