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The lecturer insisted that the scientific technology is being developed more, and manned mission to mars will become reality in the near future.
Also, he thinks problems that are mentioned in the reading passage can be
overcome.
First of all, he thinks that the dust storms on the planet cannot
prevent this mission from succeeding. In the passage, the dust storms can
damage spaceships and cause mechanical problems. These storms can harm health
of the astronauts as well. However, the lecturer says that scientists have developed
the method of using sound waves. This can successfully blow the dust out to
protect machines and health of astronauts.
Also, the lecturer argued that psychological problems among
astronauts due to the long travel period cannot be a problem. According to the
reading, the travel can take up to 300 days. This long period can make
astronauts suffer from depression and loneliness. However, the professor
explains that the extensive training program before the mission and recorded
guides from therapists can help them cope with prolonged travel.
Finally, the professor opposes the opinion in the reading passage
that financial burden will bar this mission from succeeding. According to the
reading, this can cost more than 500 billion dollars. Nevertheless, the professor
explains that people can cover up the
financial problems if many nations support this program. These countries can also benefit from technological
advances which will be a huge advantage.
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
ADDRESSING TOPIC
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ORGANIZATION
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PROGRESSION AND COHERENCE
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LANGUAGE USE
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GRAMMAR
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GOOD
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GOOD
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GOOD
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GOOD
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GOOD
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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