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There are many historic buildings
all around the world such as Gyeongbokgung Palace and Colosseum. These days,
since there aren't (any) enough places for other buildings, some people think
that the government should allow old historic buildings to be destroyed and
replaced with modern ones. However, in my opinion, the government should never
permit to demolish historical buildings.
First of all, old historic
buildings have historical value. Destroying old historic buildings means
eliminating its historical value as well.
For example, there is an old historic building called Hyeonchung Tower which is
a building that pays a high tribute to the hero who fought hard during the
Korean War. If the government decides to demolish that tower, it also means
that they do not respect to those (any of
them) who fought hard during the Korean War
and many people will disagree to destroy (about
destroying) the tower. In this regard, the
government must not destroy historical building because of its value.
Secondly, old historical
buildings attract many tourists to the city.
Many tourists travel to other countries to see historical buildings or landmarks. In other words, many countries earn a lot of money
from (these) tourism. This can help develop the national economy. For example, Italy has many
historical buildings such as Colosseum and many people travel to Italy to see those
landmarks. Italy makes a lot of money from tourism
and in fact, 10% of their GDP is from tourism. (Then, they can earn a
lot of money from tourism and the 10 percent of Italy's GDP is from tourism.)
This way, old historic buildings attract many tourists and countries can earn
money from them.
To conclude, old historical
buildings have historical value and attract many tourists to the city. This has
a lot of benefits such as helping the economy grow.
(state economy.) For these reasons, I strongly believe that the government
should not allow old historic buildings to be destroyed and replaced with
modern ones.
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