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Your Answer :
There might be
some people who believe that children should begin learning a foreign language
as soon as they start school. However, I personally disagree with the idea
above for subsequent reasons. First of all, it will be stressful for children. Second, children should learn what they want.
First of all, children can be
stressed out by learning a foreign language. To be specific, learning a foreign
language means that it requires lots of studying. For example, they need to study grammar, vocabulary, listening
and so on. According to a recent survey done by an
institute of health (*an institute of health는 무슨 기관을 의미하는 건가요?), 80 percent of the respondents
said that learning a foreign language can be stressful for children. Most
children in Korea study English, which is quite
stressful for them. (so they are stressed out now.) It is because they have homework every day and do not have time to hang out with their
friends. This clearly shows that children
should not begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school.
Second, children have to learn
what they want. When they learn what they want to know, they can memorize
better. If they study what they do not want, they will not memorize well. Let
me bring up my personal story as an example. When I was 7 years old, I studied
Chinese every weekend because my parents made me learn it. I did not want to
learn Chinese because it was really
difficult for me. Therefore, I had difficulty learning the language. (problem
with memorizing Chinese) (and I could not remind Chinese I studied now. 이 부분은 무슨 뜻인지 모르겠네요. ) If I had studied what I want, it would have been more helpful. (could remember
it until now.)
In conclusion, learning a foreign
language will be stressful for children and they should learn what they want.
For these two reasons, I personally believe that children should not begin
learning a foreign language as soon as they start school.
Writing Score
(0-30): 17-20
Score (0-5):
2.75-3.00
Grammar &
Feedback: Awkward 한 표현들이 많았고 문법적인 오류도 중간중간
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