▶ Your Answer : Undoubtedly, intelligence plays a
significant role in people’s daily lives in many of the places where they work
or play. Some people might say that they prefer a kind of friends that have
cheerfulness or consideration. However, I personally prefer a friend that has ve
smartness. There are several reasons as follows.
To begin with, when I mingle well with
smart friends, it can help me improve my academic performance. Smart people are
equipped with various knowledge that help them do work or study efficiently and
accurately. When such knowledge is well used while communicating with them and
thus I can learn from them, it is likely to bring a better result in school.
For example, according to research conducted by Harvard University, there was a
huge difference between two groups of young adults in academic performance. One
group consisted of those who had spent 2 hours a day on participating in a
study group with top students in exams, and the other group was made up of
those who had socialized with cheerful or considerate students in a study
group. The researchers found that the former was more likely to have a higher
score on the SAT than the latter. In particular, most of the first group showed
a longer attention span, a stronger passion in their tasks, and a better
ability to delay gratification because they have already known the latest trend
on the SAT exam, and thus could get higher scores on each sections. On the
other hand, although many in the second group were cheerful or considerate,
they were not enough to solve problems accurately. This implies that
communicating with smart friends is the key to success, academically as well as
professionally.
In addition, the reason why I prefer
friends that have smartness is that it can contribute for me to feel a greater
sense of achievement in study. It gives me a chance to improve my knowledge and
skills and thus be confident about myself. In fact, examinations and scores are
the most important factor for students. Thus, if I achieve a number of
knowledge, it tends to prevent me from feeling inferior to others. For example,
when I was in high school, I was depressed thinking that my life became an
exhausting routine. To survive in a competitive world, I spent the whole day
doing diverse activities with cheerful or considerate friends such as playing
soccer, computer games, or talking with them. However, it was not easy to get
over my situation. Fortunately, I was able to make my life more meaningful by
doing team projects with smart friends. They were the first rank at each subject
and thus taught each other efficiently. During this time, I could obtain a
number of solutions how to solve my exams and finally got a prize in the
mathematics contest. I realized that mingling well with smart friends could
help me achieve a greater success in school. After this experience, I keep in
touch with them.
All things considered, I strongly believe
that it is better for me to have smart friends rather than cheerful or
considerate friends for the reasons I have mentioned above. All in all, the
importance of mingling with smart friends cannot be underestimated in the
pursuit of happiness in life.
Good (26–30)
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