It has been controversial issues since people started to teach skills and
knowledge to their descendents The issue of grading students has been a controversial one
since people started teaching skills and knowledge to their descendants.
And some of these efforts were very successful,
but some trials derived reverse effects. And grading students has been
regarded as one of the most efficient one among various methods to promote
learning. This is because, it enables students to motivate themselves to study
and it encourages students study subjects they don't like.
(서론 시작을 제대로 해주세요. 예: First, a grading system motivates students to study.) Recently, a renowned educator in South Korea published an article on
last Tuesday, claiming that the recent GPA system is very effective in
motivating students. As students has lack enough experiences, they have a hard time controlling themselves. So they are easily
succumb to the temptation of playing computer
games. They usually can't study hard without any strong 'threats' even if they
have a strong will to study hard. However, the
evaluating system which is based on mid-term and final exams provides students
a short-term goal. Through this short
not only helps students to generate power to defeat the temptation of playing
but also encourages them to study hard for good
grades. Students know that GPA reports are directly related to their college
admissions and various job opportunities. Through the article, I realized that
evaluating students with grade is very helpful in motivating students to learn
various things.
A renowned educator in South Korea published a
paper related to the positive aspacts aspects
of the recent education system. He claimed that
today's evaluating system is very effective. Today's secondary school and university curriculums can be compared
to the master pieces of artists such as Statue of Liberty in the U.S. As it contains every subjects what is
necessary necessary subject, it is which is crucial for students to learn every single
courses. This is because, the courses involves knowledge which are
vital factors to survive in the current
society. However, students study less if they don't like the subjects. Especially, students extremely hate
learning math even though math can be applied to various professional realms.
However, if students are greatly motivated to study such subjects, like
math, to get good grades on these courses. Extracting the information in the
distribution added in the paper, students who were only forced to study
subjects they didn't like performed much worse than the groups never imposed to
study the boring subjects, but graded. In other words, statistically, students
were much more inspired to study hard with the short-term goals. This paper was
convincing enough for me to believe that grading students to promote their
learning is effective.
To conclude, I believe that providing students with grades enables students them
to learn better; to help motivate students themselves
and encourage students to learn subjects they don't like.
Consequently, my view cannot be underestimated due to the reasons I have
mentioned above.
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