■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : When people consider a major purchase, which of the following has the greatest impact on their choices? -recommendation from friends -information from magazines -reviews from online communities |
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▶ Your Answer :
Undoubtedly, how people make a purchase is important in our daily lives.
Some people believe that recommendations from a friend or an online community have a greater impact on their
choices, while others believe that information from magazines has the greatest
impact. Both sides may have their own reasons to support their views. But if I
were asked to choose one, I would say that getting information from the
magazine effects affects the most. There
are several reasons as follows.
To begin with, magazines are filled with advertisements including
fascinating images and catchy phrases to attract the viewers to buy the product. As the contemporary society becomes more
competitive and capitalized, there is always a newer
version of products and advertisements tends that
tend to lure people to throw away old ones and consume new ones
regardless of its necessity. To attract buyers, one of the marketing strategies found in the most of magazines is to
present an idealized image that the potential
buyers wish to become. For instance, I saw my favorite celebrity advertising a
mineral water in a magazine one day. She presented an image of a young and
successful business woman, with a perfect body
shape, saying that this mineral water is different from other ones. I was
astonished when I went to the store and bought
the same product, and realized that I subconsciously identified myself with an
image that I wished to become by consuming the
product. Therefore, I can say that advertising in the magazine plays a huge
significant role for people to purchase something.
Additionally, unlike getting information from friends or online community,
magazines provide specialized and neutral information from experts. In other
words, because of the variety of subscribing readers, such as different the difference in gender, age, taste, and interests,
the information given is more understandable and guaranteed. This is likely to
help readers make their a right decision.
For example, my youngest sister just entered a university
and she needed a new laptop for her class. She tried to find all the
information she could find on the web or asking and
even asked her their colleagues. But there were so many opinions and it
made her confusing confused to buy the
specific one. Thus, she bought a computer magazine to look up what suits her
needs. She could compare different aspects such as size, storage, weight, and
systems at ease and buy the right one for herself. Without the generalized
information from magazine, she would have wasted her time considering what to
buy.
For those reasons, I believe that
impact of the information from the magazine is greater than that of any other
option, such as recommendations from a friend or online communities.
Writing
0-30 Score Scale |
Good (24-30) |
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24 |
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Comment: |
말씀하신 대로 본문 문단들이 서로
충돌하는 내용을 다루고 있습니다. 둘 중 하나만 살려서 글을 작성하시는 게 좋을 것 같아요. 문법 오류는 위 지적사항들을 참고하세요. |
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본문 1이랑 2가 서로 충돌하는 것 같은데.. 구조를 잘 잡았는지 타당한지 알고 싶습니다. 미리 감사드립니다.
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