▶ Your Answer :
Some people may say that being creative
gives rise to the best solution to a problem rather than planning carefully.
However, I have a different idea. I think that it is best solution to become
attentive in order to solve the problems.
First of all, the best way to solve the
problems is to plan carefully because people can take an action according to
the situation. To be specific, making an attentive system is very beneficial
when people solve the problem because they can know a lot phase to resolve trouble.
For example, when I was a college student, I lived in a
dormitory with one roommate. We frequently fought each other because we had
very different characteristic. In order to maintain good atmosphere in the
room, I carefully devised plans to not fight
each other. This plan is to understand her mind, get along with her, and then
talk about real matter to fight each other carefully. As a result, through
enough conversation, we could find out problem, and come
up with new solution. Then, we could sustain good atmosphere thanks to my
step-by-step plan.
Second, people have to plan carefully in
order to solve the problem since they can make diverse choice to solve the
problem. Attentive plan in solving problems help people to think about diverse
solution. In other words, a variety of decisions can make them to approach
about problems diversely. In terms of business, most CEO would create long and
continued plan. In this process, it is very important to have a number of plans
because if they have lots of ways to resolve the problem, its company will
overcome hardship and prosper their position by planning carefully. Many
companies actually use this idea to succeed in competitive market. Therefore,
it is useful to plan carefully when people solve the problem.
To sum up, planning
attentively is more beneficial to solve problem than being ingenious because
people can take a step according to the condition and come up with various
solution. Thus, I strongly disagree with the statement above.
Good (24–30)
첫번째 본문 -명사 앞이므로 a dormitory -문맥상 복수이므로 plans /혹은 단수로 쓰실거면 a plan 으로 써주세요. -and 를 넣어주셔야 더 자연스럽습니다.
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