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It is
often mistaken that parents are the best teachers for their children. The
underlying reason is that since parents gave birth to their kids, they know
best about their children and thus they should be best qualified to teach them.
However, I disagree with the idea that parents are the best teachers. Rather, I
believe that parents cannot be the ideal teachers for two reasons: parents are
more likely to favor their children than anyone else when objective feedback is
needed for children’s growth and; parents are not always best qualified
to teach their children academic subjects.
First of
all, it is not an exaggeration that parents are
not in the position to objectively evaluate their children, and thus it makes
them not ideal to teach them. In some cases, parents blindly favor their
children even when they make huge mistakes or they do not follow regimen to do
things better. For example, when parents teach their children how to cook, they
may merely praise the foods that their children made regardless of taste and
may not give candid feedbacks to their lovely children, which is necessary for
their children to learn cook. The lack of objectivity of parents thus makes
parents not ideal to teach their children.
In
addition, it should be noted that parents are not always best qualified to
teach their children. Sometimes, they are not simply professional enough to
teach their children. For instance, although parents are qualified in law,
passing a bar exam, they may not be able to teach their children mathematics properly.
Some parents may be able to teach their kids elementary arithmetic summation
and multiplication. But, once children attend secondary schools, it is remotely
possible that parents could teach their children mathematical concepts with
proficiency. Therefore, parents are not the best teachers.
Admittedly,
it could be argued that parents are the best teachers of life lessons. It seems
to hold some truthe. Parents are well
aware of their children’s characters, traits, and life experiences, etc. which
gives them rich foundation to teach their kids life lessons. They certainly
could give excellent advice on how to choose a major in college fitting to
their children,; for instance, sharing
their professional life experiences. Nevertheless, as there is a generational
gap between parents and children, parents may not be the best teachers to let
their children know the best strategies to navigate in life.
To
conclude, although it might be true that parents can teach many valuable things
in life to their children, they are not the best teachers. This is because
parents are often biased toward their lovely kids, endangering objectivity in
evaluation or feedback, and they are not always best qualified to teach
children academic subjects.
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