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It is important for a teacher to decide how to teach
students. One of the ways of supporting learning is assigning homework. Some
believe that daily homework is unnecessary for the students. However, there are
reasons why many teachers allocate daily homework. For the following two
reasons, I agree that daily homework is necessary for student. First, in
students' perspective, they can learn and remember knowledge on regularly;
second, in teachers' perspective, they can measure the level of students by
checking their homework and organize the class level.
To begin with, daily homework improves
ability of students. In other words, every day studying helps students to
memorize the knowledge and utilize the information. Organizing and making new
thinking is a much more important factor in modern society. According to a study that conducted by Korea
University Education Institution(KUEI), students who were assigned every day
homework shows more improved understanding level and the highly interested
level in the subject. On the other hand, the students who were not assigned
daily homework, assigned once a weeak, shows low level of understanding and
organizing compared to the former. The study shows the importancet of daily
homework. The students should learn how to think by themselves. Doing daily
homework is one of the best ways. Daily
homework is necessary for the students to make their own notion ?.
In addition, the teacher can check the
students' acquired knowledge by evaluating daily homework. It is important to
match a level in a class with students' condition. The teachers need to know
how much they understood previous contents. For example, one of the history
teachers of my high school assigned every day homework to students. At the
first time, the students did not like the history class. However, after doing
daily homework, the students could understand more and more about the subject.
The teacher could lead the students to comprehend the history by following the
story in daily homework. Since the teacher consisted the class level based on
the homework quality. The teacher could know what should provide for students.
As a result, 70% students of my class showed improved grade in the final-exam
compared to relatively mid-term exam.
Modern society is changing rapidly.
Education takes an important role in our society. The daily homework makes the
schools realize their goals.
Good (24–30)
서론 -첫번째 문장 how to teach students is important for teachers 로 바꾸시던가 글에 바꾼대로 바꿔주세요. -정확한 표현이 아니면 쓰지 않는 것이 낫습니다. -마지막 문장에서, on a regular basis 나 regularly로 써주세요. 첫번째 본문 -단/복수 명사에 따른 동사변화 유의해주세요. -끝에서 세번째 문장, importance 명사형으로 써주세요. -마지막 문장에서, 파란 부분과 글의 내용과 잘 이어지지 않습니다. 학생들이 자신의 의견을 갖는다는 내용이 직접적으로 나와있지 않아서 모호합니다.
두번째 본문 -every day 를 매일의 과제 처럼 형용사로 쓰실 때는 everyday로 붙여서 써주세요. -마지막 문장에서, relatively 는 어색하고, compared to 를 써주세요. 전체적으로 내용 괜찮습니다. 문법 실수 보완해주세요.
수고하셨습니다~
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