▶ Your Answer :
The development of the Internet is often compared to the discovery of the first
fire in the primitive age because these events have revolutionized people’s
lives in a better way. With this understanding, I believe that using the
Internet helps students to learn more effectively. This is because there are
many educational contents uploaded on the Internet and the
Internet enables students to gain more academic knowledge much faster.
Firstly, there are various educational videos
(contents for educational purposes) on the Internet.
The development of the Internet stimulated the growth of the online lecture industry. (market.) This is attributed to the
reason that the online lectures not only allow people to educate themselves at
any time regardless of (no matter) the
location. Furthermore, people can take courses that
are available at school in order to (not provided in their school
helping them to) fulfill their academic interest. Also, some websites
specialize in solutions of problems in the university textbooks. University
solutions are relatively expensive for students as the cheapest one cost over
70 U.S dollars and some solutions are not even involved in solution books.
However, websites, such as ‘chegg.com’ and ‘transtutor.com’ not only deal with
over 97 percent of textbooks used in entire universities in the U.S. but also
provide all solutions at the cheapest prices.
As we have seen, these contents not only allow students to supplement and
fulfill academic knowledge without the limitation of time and location, but
also provide cheaper prices.
Secondly, students can gain more knowledge much faster. Before the development
of the Internet, students had to find information in the library. Once they
were at the library, they had to read countless of
books to find a fine quality of information. Sometimes the library
did not even have the right books (containing
adequate knowledge), so the students had to
move to another library get the information they
wanted. Such process took a long time
and was discouraging. However, the
development of the Internet revolutionized
the process of searching information. For example, students now only have to
type certain key words in the search engine to find accurate information. Also,
it is not exaggerated to say that the Internet is the sea of information.
Millions and billions of data is updated on the Internet every single second,
rendering the Internet the largest library in the world. In other words, the
amount of knowledge that students can acquire dramatically increased compared
to the past. In this respect, I believe that the Internet can help students to
gain more knowledge faster.
To sum up, I believe that students can learn more effectively with the help of
the Internet for the following reasons: there are various online contents for
education and faster ways to gain more information. Consequently the importance
of my view cannot be underestimated due to the reasons I have mentioned above.
Writing
Score (0-30): 25-27
Score
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