▶ Your Answer : Some people think that teachers should be 내용 완성해주세요. I think it is more important for teachers to connect with students than to be experts in their fields. This is because students can learn more in the same time of the class and being experts does not mean the high quality of the class.
First of all, it is important that teachers and students interact with each other to improve the quality of the class. Students can get a real knowledge and understand the subject deeply through the conversation of the class with teachers. For example, Mmany schools in Asia still have the teaching style that only teachers explain the subject and students are just listening and writing, and they barely have chance to ask questions about the class or debate on some topics. 이렇게 소통이 적을 때의 단점을 함께 언급해주세요. 단순히 두 지역의 teaching style이 다르다고만 언급하는 것은 의미가 없습니다. However, in America, teachers and students always have a talk having a talking during the class and students are can even oppose the idea of teachers. In this study environment, students can enlarge their point of view and study more effectively. On top of that, the class of teachers who have a lot of knowledge are not always attractive to students. What I mean is that, it is important for teachers to deliver the subjects well for teachers and some of them actually know a lot but do not teach students effectively. Let me explain my own experience. opinion. In my college, there is a famous professor, Professor. Lee, and I heard a lot about him that he was is a top professor in my country due to his achievement in psychology, so I chose choose his psychology class. His class was so boring bored , however, because he always used using difficult words and I felt like just reading a research in on my own. After taking took his class, I realized that the fact that teachers have more knowledge does not mean their his class is easier to understand. It is more important for teachers to teach students with understandable and interesting contents than with high level knowledge research in their field themselves. To sum up, teachers interacting with students enhance the quality of the class and students feel more interesting. In this regard, I argue that being a teacher who teachers interacts with students is more paramount for teachers than being an expert be experts in the subject they teach.
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각 본론의 주장이 입장을 뒷받침하기에 아주 좋습니다. 설명 흐름이 매끄러워질 수 있도록 연결고리를 보완해야 하는 부분들을 위주로 검토하시면 좋을 것 같아요. 문법오류와 오탈자가 많다는 점이 아쉽습니다. 정확한 문장구사에 더 신경써주세요~ 노답 아니에요^^ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Independent Writing Rubrics Score 2.5/5 An essay at this level is marked by one or more of the following : - Addresses the topic and task using somewhat developed explanations, exemplifications and/or details (일정 수준의 설명과 예시를 활용하여 문제의 요구사항을 해결함) - Displays unity, progression and coherence, though connection of ideas may be occasionally obscured (문맥이 모호한 부분들이 있을 수 있으나 통일성, 연속성, 일관성이 어느 정도 드러남) - May demonstrate inconsistent facility in sentence formation and word choice that may result in lack of clarity and occasionally obscure meaning (문장의 구성 또는 어휘의 선택에서 내용의 명확성이 떨어지거나 의미 전달이 불분명한 부분들이 있음) - May display accurate but limited range of syntactic structures and vocabulary (답안의 내용은 주제에 부합하지만 제한된 문장구조나 어휘를 사용함) |