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Opinions might be divided over whether students should take a year off
before going to college. People may take diverse positions on this
controversial issue by the age or occupation. I agree with this idea for the
following two reasons: first, it can be useful for making a good relationship
afterward and second, students can relieve stress through taking a year off to
travel.
To begin with, taking a year off to go on a trip would be conducive
to making many friends on campus. What it means is that it can lead to
developing social skills. Therefore, students can make friends to hang out with easily to hang out with by
sharing their trip experiences. I will bring up my personal experience as an
example. When I was in high school, after graduating, I went to the USA to travel
and I could see as many things as possible. Thus, I had a lot of episodes. The experience not only helped me to socialize with others on campus but also build a strong
character. I felt realized that it is easy to talk to others and hang
out with many friends after entering a college. If I had not gone to the
trip, I could would not have as many friends as I do
now. The same applies to many people like me.
On top of that, the experience can relieve stress for students.
Generally, many high school students be are
stressed out because of uninviting tasks. Therefore, they need to relieve
stress though taking some time off. In other words, students can forget about
their stress and feel refreshed by going to a trip. Furthermore, they can be
motivated to study hard after entering a college. There are many
articles which reaffirm my viewpoint. A few weeks ago, I read an op-ed piece
from Korea Herald that is related to the topic. It described the result of a
survey, which was conducted by a Seoul National
social science researcher with more than 500 people as respondents. The purpose
of the survey was to understand the consensus view that on whether taking a trip would be reasonable for
students to relieve stress. Of 500-people surveyed, over 80 percent answered
that they ended up having a positive mind and the trip instigated them to exert
their best after graduating high school. This clearly proves that going on a trip will relieve stress. This is taken for
granted at that situation.
In conclusion,
going on a trip before entering college would
not only be helpful for making a good relationship with college students but
also contribute to reducing stress. In this regard, I strongly believe that
students should take a year off to travel before going to a
college.
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