▶ Your Answer : Some people might think the informations of the news media is are reliable. They assume that newspapers and broadcasters produce the news without being biased and subjective. However, in my opinion, the news media is not that reliable unbiased or objective. This is because beacuse the companies making the news pursue their own financial profit and overstate the fact to allure people.
To begin with, the news reports are produced actually for the income by the news media. The purpose of the news companies is earning the money as they give the news to people. Especially, the advertisements are the prime income, and the media companies company do not want to make the news which is not helpful to them in obtaining obtain the advertisements from large companies. For example, the new media is apt to never publish a bad news of large companies, such as Samsung or LG, even when the companies do not make a good result. In contrast, they produce a lot of good news when the large companies overachieve. overachive.
On top of that, the news media often overstate the fact and even transform a source in order oder to attract as many people as possible. The more people see their news, the more profits they can get there benefit. In particular, it is so important for the new media to get be focused their information informations focused beacuse because there are a lot of the news in on the internet or television program, so on. For this reason, the news media companies always use a provocative comments. For instance, when an accident, which that a large ship sank with a lot of people, occurred, was occured, even though many people were was not rescued saved, a broadcaster published publiced the news that almost most passengers passagers in the ship were are safe. Without checking the collected fact, it turned out that the broadcaster made make false news in order to allure viewers and many people misunderstood how serious that stuation is.
To sum up, the news media make new informations for their own interests. In this regard, I strongly believe the news media is not unbiased and impartial too biased and partial to rely on.
Comment : 미디어의 사익추구와 시청자를 끌기 위한 과장보도 때문에 신뢰도가 떨어진다는 주장은 아주 좋습니다. 논리 내용이 끝맺음을 보여줄 수 있게 좀 더 설명을 구체적으로 제시해주세요. 사례를 제시할 때도 '이런 일이 있었다'에서 끝나는 게 아니라 그 사례가 미디어의 이익 추구 때문에 보도가 제대로 이루어지지 않은 사례이고, 이런 점에서 봤을 때 미디어를 완전히 신뢰하기 어렵다는 주장이 연결되도록 내용을 완결지어주는 것이 좋습니다. 문법오류와 어색한 표현이 많은 편이니 작성할 때 정확한 문장 구사에 더욱 신경써주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Independent Writing Rubrics Score 2.5/5 An essay at this level is marked by one or more of the following : - Addresses the topic and task using somewhat developed explanations, exemplifications and/or details (일정 수준의 설명과 예시를 활용하여 문제의 요구사항을 해결함) - Displays unity, progression and coherence, though connection of ideas may be occasionally obscured (문맥이 모호한 부분들이 있을 수 있으나 통일성, 연속성, 일관성이 어느 정도 드러남) - May demonstrate inconsistent facility in sentence formation and word choice that may result in lack of clarity and occasionally obscure meaning (문장의 구성 또는 어휘의 선택에서 내용의 명확성이 떨어지거나 의미 전달이 불분명한 부분들이 있음) - May display accurate but limited range of syntactic structures and vocabulary (답안의 내용은 주제에 부합하지만 제한된 문장구조나 어휘를 사용함) |