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An intriguing topic of discussion at hand is whether travel with a
group led by a guide or not, it seems sensible
that travle travel by group and guide; however, with in-depth analysis the statements
seems too far-fetched. (무슨 뜻인지 파악하기 어렵습니다.) Although,
people may hold different ideas and opinions, I personality personally support the ideas to travel with alone idea of travelling alone because of two reasons: to gain valuable experience and perventing to prevent stress.
To begin with, when it comes to gaining
valuable experience, traveling alone is more sensible. Albert Einstein once said the only source of knowledge is
experience and one of the best ways of gaining such valuable experience is to
travel alone and this will be a great advantage when they start warking working in society, and therefore we should travel
alone because i we can gain valuable
experience. (위 문장이 너무 깁니다. Comma로
억지로 많은 문장을 잇지 마시고, 중간 중간 합쳐주시는 게 흐름에 더 자연스러워요.) According to the a Korean sociologist, when people travel on their own without a group
and nor a guide,
It is more effective to gain valuable experience. This is because when people
travel with a group, it is impossible to visit places other than the ones the guide leads you or the ones
the group members are headed to. except where the guid or group
point.
Thus, this will decrease the possibility to
gain valuable experies experiences, and
therefore, people should travel on their own and
travel valuable place explore various places to
gain valuable experiences.
Second, when it comes to the importance of preventing stress, traveling alone
is more sensible. Since the world is becoming colder than before, (세상이 추워지는 것과 스트레스와 연관성을 증명하시거나, 다른 문장을 써주시는 게 좋습니다) the place
where people gain stress is on the rise the number
of sources of stress is on the rise; but the problem is that there is are
no proper ways of dealing with the issue. and
However, the best ways
of preventing stress is to travel with alone, since this is because traveling alone is more effectible
effective for people to prevent stress because it
is associated with otherwise, one will have to
travel with other people and groups. (마찬가지로 문장이 너무 깁니다) This is because the most of the sources
of stress is come from people relationships.
In a nutshell, although the
question of whether to travel with a group or to travel
alone is open to interpretation, it seems reasonable that
travel with travelling alone is preferable because of the two reasons above discussion in the essays.
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