▶ Your Answer :
Some people might think that Televison is not good
for children's studying environment, while others might not. If I were asked to
choose one, I would say that reducing time for TV is good for children's
academic performance. There are several reasons as follows.
To begin with, when parents prevent children from
watching TV, children can spend their time to study and thus improve their academic performance. Because TV programs, such as
dramas, music shows and reality shows, are so attractive to children, they tend
to spend too much time on watching them. By prohibiting children
watching TV, they can make better use of time. For example, many research
center, including Seoul National University, analyzed data from two groups of
young adults. One group consisted of those who had habitually watched TV more
than 2 hours a day, and the other group was made up of those who had watched TV
less than 30 minutes a day. Ther researchers found that
the latter had a higher score on SAT than the former. In particular, the
second group had more studying time, a longer attention span than the
first group. This implies that watching TV is not good for student's
academic performance. If they had reduced their time watching TV, they have
been able to focus on studying.
In addition, when children do not watch TV, they can
use spared time to make a longer conversation with their parents. Thus, parents
can tell them advice to children's school life and academic performance.
If parents give advice to their children,
children are likely to have motivation for study and study harder.
For example, my younger brother spent his whole day watching Television and
thought his school life as tedious routine. However, my parents
decided to remove TV set and gave advice to him about a goal of life.
After this, he became very diligent student and spent more time on
studying. Without removing TV set, he would have fallen fell
behind.
All things
considered, the advantages of not allowing children to spend too much time on
TV far outweigh those of letting them watch it.
Good (24–30) 첫번째 본문 -academic 철자 오류. 철자 오류 Ther-->The
두번째 본문 -철자 오류. children -마지막 문장 가정법은 would have p.p. 과거분사를 써야하므로 fell-->fallen
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