▶ Your Answer : Some people believe that the knowledge about the method of reading and writing is not important at the present. However, in my opinion, it is very important to know how to read and write today. There are two reasons; first, people can survive in today's society with the reading and writing skills. Moreover, they can keep human relationship better with these skills. First of all, people can survive in the competitive society by using reading and writing skills. To survive in this world of endless competition, people ought to know how to read and write. In the case of job search, everyone is aware that getting a job is like a camel passing through the eye of a needle nowadays. One's ability can be clouded by other's abilities. In order to stand out, a person must have ability to read and write. For example, there was a poll conducted by the board of Korean job training center, with 300 people as respondents. The purpose of the consensus was to understand about the important factors in getting a job in today's society. The majority of respondents ranked reading and writing skill over others. An overwhelming 88% replied that the ability to read and write is essential factors in companies because the ability is necessary for the successful communication among different business. This survey proves that the knowledge about reading and writing is a necessary factor in job acquisition. On top of that, people can keep human relationship better (knowledge to read and write가 반대 입장보다 어떤 더 나은 benefit을 주는 것이 핵심이기 때문에 better/more 등을 활용해주세요) through the ability to read and write. The meaning of success has completely changed compared to the past. In the past, it was merely focusing on one's own way to exceed others, now it is different. Along with your own ability, it is crucial to have people who can lend you a hand when you are in trouble. The ability to read and write is an important skill to keep an improved level of human relationship. For example, there was poll conducted by the institution of Korean sociology, 300 people as respondents. The purpose of the survey was to understand about how to communicate with other people. The majority of respondents responded that they communicate with other people through mobile phone text message on Mobile phones and do not meet someone directly. This survey demonstrates that modern people depend heavily on text-based communication, and it is very important to know how to read and write. To sum up, people can survive in this society of endless competition. In addition, they can keep human relationship better (어떻게 더 better하게 keep 하는지에 대해서는 내용이 충분히 설명되어 있지 않습니다). In this regard, I firmly hold that modern people need to have ability to read and write.
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
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ORGANIZATION
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PROGRESSION AND COHERENCE
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LANGUAGE USE
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GRAMMAR
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FAIR
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LIMITED
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LIMITED
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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