▶ Your Answer :
Some people think ranking
grades in the class lowers students’ learning because they get more stress. However, in
my opinion, Students will try to learn more when grades are provided because
each person will recognize their position by comparing themselves with others, and this would
eventually lead them to develop themselves more.
To begin with, it is easier
for the students to overcome their own problem when they know what is wrong.
Students will know the position of his state compared with others when grades
are provided. Each of them will recognize what parts they are inefficient while
talking with friends who are better than themselves. For example, when I was in high school,
I was not good at history at the very first time. Initially, I got a low grade
on the class. To get better grades, I ask one of my friends how to study history. He
told me the process of thinking that is useful when learning history, and eventually I got a better score than before.
On top of that, because
students know the position, they will be motivated much more to learn compared
to the situation they do not know the grade. This is because showing grades to
the students makes competitive environment among (3인 이상 = among, 2인 = between) the classmates. Positive
competition is advantageous for students to learn fast. For instance, I enjoy
playing tennis with one of my best friends while taking a rest because we both
want to beat each other. We practice harder and harder to win.
After few years passed, we found an astonishing truth that I and my best
friend are at top seed compared to others who started learning tennis in similar
time. ('경쟁'이라는 테마는 맞으나 성적을 통해 생기는 경쟁의 예시가 본 내용을 support하기에 더 적합하다고 볼 수 있습니다. 다른 예시를 작성해주세요)
I strongly believe that providing
grades to the students promotes learning because they can ask others more
efficiently to enhance their ability (이유가 이것이 아닌 '자신의 실제 점수를 알고 이를 타인과 비교해서 더 나은 성적을 이후에 받을 수 있다' 로 작성했기 때문에 본인이 작성한 내용과 일관되게 써 주세요) and a healthy competition can be created, which can create synergetic effect on improving students' grades. there is a positive effect while
competing others. In this regard, I agree with the statement that ~.
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
ADDRESSING TOPIC
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ORGANIZATION
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PROGRESSION AND COHERENCE
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LANGUAGE USE
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GRAMMAR
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GOOD
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GOOD
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FAIR
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FAIR
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FAIR
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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