▶ Your Answer : An intriguing topic in discussion at hand is whether students should take a year off after graduating from high school to travel or work. Although many people argues that students should keep studying and go to college, I do not agree with this argument. I firmly maintain that student should take a year off after graduating from high school before going to college for following two reasons: this period is the best time to take a break before students continue their career and students can experience the big world.
First, this period, after graduating from high school and before going to college, is the best time for students to take a break. Students have been studied for more than 10 years without taking a break. If they do not don't take a break during this period, it will be more hard for them to take a break. To be specific, after getting a job, it is not easy to take a long break, unless decide to quit a job. In other words, people will have to keep working to maintain their job career. Someone might think that taking a year off is risky, however, today, human beings are expected to live up to 100 years. Thus, taking a year off is not risky at all. It is more reasonable to say that taking a year off is the time for refilling the energy so they can go further in their future career.
Moreover, taking a year off gives students opportunity to have valuable experiences. They have been only taught in school which is a very small world. They can experience the bigger world. Learning things from books and from real world is totally different story. Thus, taking a year off and going on a travel is a very recommendable. Through the trip, they will get to meet many people from different country and backgrounds, taste different food, cultures and know what they want to become in the future. Let me take myself as an example. A few years ago, right after I graduated from high school, I traveled for 5 months in Europe and Africa. During my trip, I could meet many people from various countries and backgrounds. One of those people who i I met during my trip was a global financial analyst. I asked him about many questions since i was curious about finance and how he work in finance area was very cool. He became my role model and now i I am studying economics and finance in university.
To sum up, I firmly argue that students should take a year off before they go to college. It will become their valuable time to have various experiences and refill their energy.
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