■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Your Answer :
Both the
reading and the lecture have contradictory opinions about the causes of marsupials'
extinction in some areas. Although the writer proposes three possible reasons
that marsupials had a hard time adapting to their environments, the professor in
the lecture indicates that these reasons have problems.
To begin
with, the professor mentions that marsupials carry their babies more carefully than other animals.
For example, kangaroos used their pouches to grow their babies and these habits
are very useful in protecting to protect their babies. Also babies drink mothers' milk, and
mothers' milk can improve babies’ immune systems. This rebuts the writer's
assertion that baby marsupials are easy to die due to their undeveloped immune systems birth.
Moreover,
the professor goes on to say that they can survive in harsh weathers by eating
slowly. It is very useful because they can live for a long period without foods.
Moreover, they can regulate their body temperature easily by preventing their
body from being overheated overheating in hot and dry places. This contradicts the writer's viewpoint
that says marsupials died out in harsh weather due to their low metabolic rate.
Lastly, the
professor mentions that marsupials more lived for a longer period in some places well such as
Australia rather than other species did. In the past, lots of species lived in
Australia. However, many species died out. But marsupials did not. This means
that marsupials more adapt better to the environment of some areas than other animals do. This counters the writer's claim
that marsupials died out due to being outcompeted by mammals. |
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점수: 24/30
1. 에세이가 전체적으로 professor 위주입니다. writer의 분량이 조금 더 많았으면 좋겠습니다.
2. 문장을 무조건 잇는 것은 매우 안 좋습니다. 가능하면 끊어주세요. In the past, lots of species lived in Australia. However, many species died out. But marsupials did not. 이렇게 한 문장을 세개로 쪼개도 전혀 이상하지 않지요? 오히려 문장이 길면 어색해진답니다.
3. 비교급 (ex. better, more) 문장에는 반드시 than A or B 처럼 무엇과 비교해서 더 그렇다는건지 확실히 해주시면 더 좋답니다.
She's prettier. 보다 She's prettier than me. 가 더 완성도 있는 문장입니다.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*