▶ Your Answer : It seems that teenagers build their own world and live there with only their friends. Needless to say, they tend to influence to their friends and get influenced from others as well. Therefore, I agree with the statement that teenagers get affected a lot from their peers than anyone else.
To begin with, I believe that teenagers are in a phase where they build a very strong relationship with their friends rather than their parents. As far as I have seen, these young people think that they are old enough and it is time to be more independent. In some cases, teenagers think that their parents do not understand them well anymore and the time they spend with their friends are more valuable. For example, when my younger sister was in middle school, which was her adolescence, all of sudden, she changed a lot. Once she came back from school, she directly went into her room and closed the door. She hardly talked with parents and spent time with only her friends. It seemed like there were two different personalities in her;, one at home and another at school. She did not listen to parents at all;, on the contrary, she was always in favor of her friends' opinions. Even she became a fan of her closest friend’s favorite movie star.
Furthermore, teenagers obtain an emotional stability from their friends, which they used to find from their family before. Students tend to make a friends group sharing their common interests and build a strong bond in their relationship. It is not so difficult to find some girls who wear same clothes or have the same hairstyle in the street. It seems that they create their own small world and live there with their own rules, and this world offers them a sense of stability. At the same time, students are afraid of being different from others and want to stay in a same circle. As the young mutually influence each other a lot, sometimes they even find their role model among their friends. From my very personal experience, I firmly believe that most of my personality was built when I was a teenager and it was the outcome of interactions with my friends at that time. In my friend group, there was a girl who was very active and positive. I liked her a lot and wanted to have an optimistic perspective just like her. Considering my positive way of thinking now, I think I got affected greatly from her consciously and also unconsciously.
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수고하셨습니다~~ Teenagers are very sensitive and in the very important stage of their lives. In terms of the amount of influence they give and take with each other, relationships with friends would be crucial to them.
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