▶ Your Answer :
While some people asssert assert
that it was eaiser easier to succeed in
the past without the help of their family, I believe this is not true. I think
that it is much more easier, nowadays, to achieve success without
the family's help and support due to the following reasons. First, there are more various fields and opportunities
that people can succeed in. Second, the government or organisaations organizations these days are more supportive and more
planned to help people to become successful.
First, due to the development of technology and because our society
has become more complicated, there are more various ways and fields that people
can work to succeed. In the past, fields were more restricted and people solely
concentrated on agriculture and domestic jobs. However, nowadays, there
are more professions that one can freely delve into in order to be successful.
For example, a singer in South Korea became successful in his field by finding
a blue ocean. In the past, this would not be possible as most people would be
working in the primary sector and would not think of exploring other fields to
be successful. The wider opportunities that people have, the better possibility
of becoming successful.
Second, nowadays, people do not need much support from their family
because the government or other organisations organizations
can support one to succeed. In the past, when information was not widely
spread, people did not know that the government
can support them in a variety of ways. Also, in
modern days, because the government is playing a
greater role and is more organised organized,
they provide programs to support people to succeeed succeed. For example, the government can fund poor people so that they can have an equal
opportunity to succeed or can provide loans for small business to grow. This is
the reason why family's help has become less significant than in the past.
The role of the family has
become minor and it is eaiser easier
to achieve success without your family's help than in the past. This is
because, as stated above, there are various opportunities for people to work in
and not only the family but also, other organisations organizations can help one to succeed.
Writing
0-30 Score Scale |
Good (24-30) |
Score |
27 |
Overall
Comment: |
좋습니다! 전체적으로 흐름이 좋고
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