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Undoubtedly, universities should keep improving their facilities and services for their students. Some people think that the universities should use their money to support students’ social activities. However, I do not agree with the opinion above. I think the schools should spend their money on improving food at the school restaurants because it can make students stay healthy and use their time effectively. First of all, using funds on improvement of cafeteria helps to students can stay healthy. When university cafeterias provide students with a good quality of food, students can get enough nutrient and energy, leading to a healthier campus life stay healthy by using the cafeterias. For instance, when I was in college, I often went to the school restaurant to have a lunch. However, after I ate food at the restaurant, I felt uncomfortable with my stomach. Thus, I could not use there anymore and grabbed something to eat at the convenience store. One day, my school decided to improve food at the restaurant and my friend suggested me to use there again. I could see that the restaurant provided healthier food than before and I did not feel uncomfortable after eating them. Thus, I could keep using the school cafeteria and stay healthy. Second, students can use their time effectively. If the school cafeterias can use the school’s budget to improve their food, they can provide students with a good quality of food at the reasonable price. Then, students do not need to go to other restaurants to have a meal. Therefore, students can save their time and use it effectively. For example, my friend usually used to go to the restaurants outside of the school because he did not want to eat bad lunches with poor quality that the school restaurant offered. It took a long time for him to go outside the school and to come back his class room. One day, his school decided to use their budget to improve food. My friend was satisfied with the better food and kept using the school cafeteria. It made him save his time to move and he could use his time to participate in a book debate club. To sum up, I believe that the universities should use their money to improve food at their cafeterias rather than to support social activities for students. This is because students can stay healthy and use their time effectively.
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