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Contradicting purposes of Nazca Lines suggested by the passage, the lecturer insists that there is no way to estimate what they are intended for. (Bit awkward, Better to separate each opinion)
To begin with, she contends that it is insufficient to say that Nazca Lines are used for celestial purpose. (Clearly mention whether it is a speaker's opinion or an author's) Though it was a popular hypothesis to early researchers, more and more evidences have proved that this thesis is logically implausible. For example, in 1970s, some scholars have utilized computers to establish a database of the remains, and it was concluded that most pictures were non-astronomical entities. (Why's that?) This result shows that Nazca Lines would not be primarily used for forecasting star disposition and eclipses.
Additionally, the professor argues that it is unrealistic to say that there are installed for artistic objectives. (Wrong sentence, It should be " they". Also, if you want to use "they", it must be mentioned "the subject" firstly) As the only to see the full picture of the lines is to view them from the air, for the Nazca ancestors lacking the ability to watch something on the sky, it would be impossible for them to look around the whole picture and contemplate its beauty. (What does it mean?) Therefore, according to her, the assumption that the remains for artistic purpose came up from the passage is illogical.
Finally, the lecturer challenges the point of the passage that the Nazca Lines played a part as navigating. For Instance, a monkey tail figure of Nazca Lines are shaped like a spiral, so if a person walks inside the monkey tail he or she might lose how to arrive on its destination. (Need more specific description) As a consequence, it is improper to mention that Nazca Lines took a role as a map guiding the people how to get where they want to go.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 2 | 2 | 2 | 2 | Score | Limited 10-17 | - 문법이 틀린 문장들이 다수 포함되어 있네요.
- 글의 첫 문두는 she/ he등 대명사가 아닌, speaker, lecturer등으로 특정 명칭을 사용할 수 있도록 해주세요. - 포인트가 명료하게 드러나 있지 않고 reading의 의견이 누락되어 있습니다.
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