Some people think letting a
friend know their his mistake is not
better than saying nothing or doing nothing. Instead, I think acknowledging
letting a friends
know their mistake is better than saying nothing or doing nothing. Let me
explain why I think this way by the following
two reasons.
First, if I let my friends know their mistake, I could
help their job span careers. It means that their job period can be lengthened by knowing
their mistakes. With a lack of natural
resources and geographical disadvantages, South Korea frequently faces economic
inferiority. (맥락에 어울리지
않습니다. 흐름이 끊겨요.) It means their jobs are crucial to support their
livelihood. They have no choice but to earn
money through their jobs and to lengthen their job span. By the survey in the
Korea Herald newspaper, 80% of companies which employ part-timers have been
fired them employees who have had shown their mistakes. For example, one of my
friends have has not been fired from her company because I let her know her mistake, which was her bad habit of not cleaning after eating. that
she did not clean after eating. Before I let her know, she did not know
about her mistake. She misunderstood she cleaned it. Due to knowing her
mistake, she has worked there well. On the other hand, in the same company,
another person has been fired because he has had
not thrown away litters to the trash can after eating. Due to that, he suffers
from having no job and earning no money. (예시가 너무 극적입니다. 쓰레기를 버리지 않았다고 해고 당하는
것보다 조금 더 알맞은 예시를 들어주세요.)
Second, I could let my friends to get better
grades by letting them know their mistakes. As there are thousands of rivals in
the competitive society, possessing superior grades is significant for students
who are preparing to go to a good university. prepare
their university to go to the good university. According to the a survey in the a
study magazine in the South Korea, students who know their mistakes in their
study could go to the a good university.
For instance, one of my friends came to me for knowing to know why he had gotten bad grades in his math
exams. I could find some same mistakes he took made.
I let him make the mistake note that he could write his mistake in his exam
I gave him some advices regarding his mistakes.
After that, he could increase his math grades.
In conclusion, I think letting a friends know their mistakes is better than doing nothing or
saying nothing in aspects of backgrounds that South Korea is a competitive
society and has economic inferiority. (economic
inferiority를 증명할 수 있는 문장들을 써주세요. 차라리
economic inferiority보다 취업난으로 적어주시면 더 적절할 것 같습니다.)