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There
has been an argument regarding the issue of whether class that require daily
assignment is more desirable than the one that doesn’t require any homework class with daily assignments is better. Some
people maintain that they prefer to taking classes with daily homework assignments
as it helps them to study the subject outside the class take classes with daily homework assignments. However, by taking
classes with few or no homework assignments, I think students can get greater
outcomes for the following reasons.
To
begin with, every students have their own priority in choosing which subjects
to study in their free time has their own priority in choosing which subjects to study (이유에 대한 설명을 구체적으로 하고 난 후에 예시를 서술하시길 바랍니다). For instance, even though every sophomore in the
high school takes same calculus class, some students have interests in the calculus
while others don’t find any interest at all while others' interests are different. Students shouldn’t be should not be (독립형 에세이에서는 줄인말을 서술하면 안됩니다) forced to
study the subject in which they don’t have any interests. However, if they need
to spend lots of time doing their assignments everyday after class, they will have
less time in studying other subject that they really like.
On
top of that, students go through lots of stresses since they have the duty of submitting
assignments. Having assignments that hasn’t done yet will bring big pressure as
it feels like the extension of the school class. According to a survey
conducted in Birms University in 2009, among the students who reported themselves
that they have high academical pressures, 42% of them also reported that they
are currently taking classes which have a large amount of daily assignments .
In
a nutshell, my contention is that classes that doesn’t that do not (classes는 복수 주어 입니다) require extra
assignments after the class is more preferable than that has lots of daily
assignments. This is because taking Taking (this is because는 적절하지 않는 표현 입니다) classes requiring requires daily assignments will
infringe students’ rights to choose which subjects they would study and give a
lot of stresses to students. As we can see, taking classes that give few or no
assignments is better.
점수: 23 각 단락이 서로 문제가 있는 독립형 에세이입니다. 첫 번째 단락 같은 경우에 있어서는 이유에 대한 설명을 좀 더 구체적으로 하고 난 후에 에시로 넘어가시길 바랍니다. 이유에 대한 설명이 완벽하지 않은체 예시로 넘어가다 보면 무엇을 말하려고 하는 것인지를 모르기 때문에 좀 더 구체적으로 서술하시길 바랍니다. 두 번째 단락 같은 경우는 내용이 너무 빈약합니다. .좀 더 구체적으로 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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