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Each person has his or her own opinion regarding environment protection. Some people think alternative energy is important while others think that alternative energy or enforcing the law is important. Personally I think enforcing the law is the best way to protect the environment for following the two reasons To begin with, enforcing the law is the most effective and strongest method to protect the environment. To be specific, once law is enacted, people should abide by law regardless of (전치사) their willingness. Moreover many studies reveal that enforcing the law is the most effective (품사) method to protect. (문장부호 꼭 써주세요) In Korea, fine dust problem is very severe. Government contemplates how to deal with this problem. Government tries (주어 동사 불일치) to do many things to solve this problem such as promoting the public transportation. However it does not work. Government enacts the law that prohibits car drive when air condition is bad. According to the study conducted by Korea university, after implementing this law, fine dust is decreasing tremendously. On top of that. I think other two options seem to be bad ideas To sum up, enforcing the law is the most effective and strongest. Also other two options seem to be bad. Considering this. government should consider enforcing the law to protect the environment rather than other two options | |
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결론부터 말씀드리자면 아직 문법이 에세이를 쓸 정도의 문법은 아닙니다.
문장도 아닌, phrase (구) 별로 영작을 계속해서 연습해주세요.
에세이는 분량만 채운다고 되는게 아닌 문법을 완성함으로써 하나의 문장을 만들어야 합니다.
지금은 너무 아이디어가 흩어져 있고
문법이 그걸 하나로 묶어주지 못하고 있습니다.
철자 오류도 많은 편이고 대소문자 등 기본적인 글쓰기 원칙도 지켜지지 않고 있어요.
당분간은 구조나 내용에 신경쓰지마시고 기초 문법부터 차근차근 연습하시기 바랍니다.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*