■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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▶ Topic :
In today’s world, the ability to cooperate well with other people is more important than in the past. | |
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▶ Your Answer :
An intriguing topic of discussion at hand is whether the ability to cooperate well with other people is more important in today’s world than in the past. The answer to this question can vary greatly depending on the individual perspectives. Thus, the jury may still be out, but as far as I am concerned, I agree with the statement. In this essay, I will present two reasons supporting my standpoint as follows.
First, most kinds of the works in today have more complex structures than in the past. Even though no one denies that each person has responsibility to their own work, it is more justifiable to contend that the most products are developed through the combination of their works. For example, mobile phones are produced by many types of workers. It is necessary many factory workers and software designers to develop a mobile phone. Therefore, only through cooperation can we make complex products used in modern world.
Moreover, today’s world requires us to think multilaterally for dealing with many problems. In other words, we have to collect various point of view because a single decision can affect greatly across the whole society. For illustration, a new policy of welfare that giving more support to disabled people can seem to be better than old one. However, it also can cause budget crisis if economic conditions were not investigated enough by economic professionals. In this regard, we have to cooperate others for most of the social problems.
In conclusion, I strongly argue for my standpoint on account of the two reasons mentioned above. Once again, although the verdict may still be out, I personally believe that two of my rationales above are sufficiently convincing enough to represent the viewpoints of a majority of people who are in favor of my claim. | |
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