▶ Your Answer : Some people argue that driving private automobiles
during rush hour is selfish conduct, so that it should be restricted with extra
charges. However, in my opinion, such resolution not only perturbs personal
freedom to own and drive cars, but also ineffective solution to the traffic
congestion.
The first and foremost reason why people should not be
charged with driving their own private mobile during rush hour is because it is
against the basic principle that personal freedom should be protected. It is
citizen’s freedom and their own will to buy cars and drive them. In addition, it
is wholly their choice of freedom to drive anytime anywhere. Such basic rights
of freedom should be protected under any circumstances. No society or authority
has given rights to interfere such choice. Charging fees on driving their
private cars is one of these acts that go against the principle. Therefore, the
charge should not be put on any given situation.
On top of that, charging on driving their private
mobiles is not a good way to solve deeper problem which is traffic congestion.
I believe that the idea comes from the chronicle trouble that every city goes through
which is traffic congestion. Making drivers to pay extra charges is only a
temporary solution to this problem. That is, some people will still want to
drive their mobiles even though they have to pay few extra charges because it
is just more convenient, leaving the problem unsolved. Therefore, better
solution should be implemented such as installing more traffic roads or
improving public transportation system. In this regard, charging fees on drivers
is short-sighted decision. It is obvious that there is a better way.
In conclusion, people’s freedom of rights to drive
anytime anywhere should not be perturbed by charging fees and there exists
better ways to solve the deeper issue that is traffic congestion. For these
reasons, I disagree with the statement.
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