It is impossible to be completely honest with your friends.
*진하게 표시한 부분은 제가 파악한 문단의 주요 내용이니 참고하세요^^
A thought provoking issue concerns concern whether friends can be completely honest to each other. Some people believe believed that even if they are friends, being totally honest is impossible. It is therefore timely to consider the validity of this perspective. perspectives. For the follwing reasons, 마침표삭제 I agree that it is possible to be honest with my friends. First, being honest with friends improves improve their friendship; Furthermore, these this enhanced friendship also enables enable us to help each other when we need indeed.
OFF TOPIC 친구에게 완전히 솔직할 수 있는지/없는지를 묻고 있으므로 친구에게 솔직하면 좋은 점에 대해 설명하는 것은 논제에 대한 답변이 될 수 없습니다. '왜' 완전히 솔직할 수 있는지 / '왜' 완전히 솔직하기는 어려운지를 설명해야 합니다. 논제 내용을 다시 점검해보시고 알맞은 답변이 되게끔 재구성해주세요. 현재 글에서는 문법요소만 우선 체크해드리겠습니다.
To begin with, a person is able to accumulate the friendship by expressing their opinion honestly. honestely. This is because the By being honest to each other, friendship can be easily established. The friendship between friends is made of their memorable experience. For example, when I was a teenager, I am used to close closing my mind to friends because I thought talking my thought think honestly may would trigger controversy controversion between friends. However, not until high school that my point of view has transformed unrecognizably while talking about something honestly. 내용이 잘 이해되지 않습니다. 밑줄 친 부분 적절한 표현과 문법요소 활용해서 수정해주세요. The My first-hand experience improved the friendship with him. This example shows that being honest honestly with friends can be possible by talking with friends.
In addition, when people are in trouble, they are able to receive the help by asking friends for help honestly. There are countless barriers varriers in this world. Even though these impediments impediment make our life much harder and worse, a person can pass through these hardships hardship with friends' friend's help. For instance, whenever I have many worries about my carrer, I often talk to Shin who is my best friend and he gives gave me a help helpful advice. advise. These advised His advice always helps helped me to get over those my concerns, and to manage eventually managed to make it eventually. *advice는 불가산명사이므로 수량표현이 따로 없습니다. This example shows that a reciprocal relation with my friends can be made by expressing my worries honestly.
As I mentioned above, I believe that there is no reason why being honestly with friends is possible. impossible. This is because honest relation with friends gives gave people opportunities to enhance the friendship and help each other when they need indeed.
주요 채점기준 (항목별 5-4-3-2-1점수로 30점 만점 자가채점)
논제 파악 effectiveness in addressing the task
적절한 설명 appropriate explanation
적절한 예증, 구체적 설명 appropriate exemplification, details
일관성, 단계적 구성, 주제와의 연관성 unity, progression, coherence
다양한 단어 구사 syntactic variety
적절한 단어 선택, 관용적 표현 word choice, idiomaticity
Writing 0–30 score scale
Limited (1–16)
문법 오류가 많으면 내용 전달력이 떨어집니다. 수일치, 태, 품사활용 등에 유의하면서 작문해주세요.
앞서 설명했듯 논제에 대한 답변이 될 수 없기 때문에 논리력을 평가하는 항목에서 대부분 감점요인이 생깁니다. 논제가 묻는 내용을 정확하게 파악하고 답변을 구성할 수 있도록 신경써주세요^^ 수고 많으셨습니다. 화이팅!