▶ Your Answer : Have you ever been to a historic place? A historic place has old stories which occurred in the past and ancient cultures. They are unique, so new places can not replace them with modern styled buildings. many people would old buildings should be replaced, but I think that we should preserve memorical, historical buildings in a city. In my opinion it is better to preserve the memorial buildings for the following subsequent reasons.
First of all, people need to protect old places because they may be an art by themselves (이것은 무엇을 말하려고 하는 것인가요?). The art of place has unique qualities of historical time, so the buildings that built a long time ago are momentous places. We should value the high significance of them.
In addition, old places should be conserved because they may be educational places for students to visit. Students can learn history to see where old people lived and stayed. For example, at school, young students go to see a famous historic area to know the history. In fact, people who have good knowledge about history can realize how significant old legacy are and have an interest on the past.
Finally, we should hand what we have over our posterity as they are because they may understand lives from the precious legacy. All the people in the future learn history by observing historical examples. Moreover, they can respect previous generation as getting to know where they come from.
For these reason, it is the best way for people to preserve historic buildings in a city because they are an art by themselves, educational places to visit and precious legacy for the porterity in the future. I hope that people manage the ancient places carefully and keep watching out to protect them for ever to see the beauty of the past.
점수: 20 이유를 세가지를 하였는데 세가지 이유 모두 무엇을 말하려고 하는 것인지 모르겠습니다. 전체적으로 설명이 모호하다 보니까 이 에세이를 통해서 무엇을 전달하려고 하는 것인지 모르겠습니다. 세 가지 이유로 장황하게 무슨 말을 하려고 하는 지를 모르게 하는 것 보다는 두 가지 이유로 간결하게 자신의 주장을 명확하게 전달하는 것이 좋을 거 같습니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |