■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : Becuase most environmental problems are too complicated, individuals can do nothing about them on their own. |
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▶ Your Answer :
Currently, environmental problems can be a key issue in modern society. Some people think that most environmental problems are not too complicated, and that individuals can do many things about them on their own, while others think differently. Both arguments may have their own reasons to support their ideas. I believe that individuals can do nothing about most environmental problems for the following two subsequent reasons.
First of all, individuals are incapable of coping with complex environment issues. This is because many people today are living in a world of meritocracy where only extremely qualified ones can survive. Therefore, they suffer physically and mentally from tight schedules and highly competitive environment. Thus, there is not much one can do to solve environmental issues. In my case, I tried to join the project or events for protecting environmental problems, but I did not (공식적인 writing에서 줄임말은 지양해주세요.) have enough time and money to participate in these activities since I had to a lot of things to do for my study and part time job and other things.Therefore, I think that individuals can not be able to solve these environmental problems.
The second reason lies in the limit of the present technology and the complexity of environmental issues. Without government's protection, even a tiny element of pollution will by all odds accumulate to a dangerous degree that will eventually cause a serious damage to the environment. Therefore, it is important for the (관사) government to protect the environment since individuals cannot do anything effective for this issue. Recently, I watched one news about environmental problems in one city. The citizens tried to solve the problems but they didn't get a financial support from government and the problems could not be solved by current technical skills. (구체적으로 어떤 종류의 문제였고 정부는 왜 그들에게 금전적인 지원을 해주지 않았떤 건가요? 조금 더 상세하게 elaborate해주셔야 합니다. 지금은 너무 broad하고 general해요.) So they could (시제) not do anything for these problems. Therefore, without government's help and more advanced technology, individuals have a limit in (전치사 필요) coping with environment'r problems.
As explicitly and logically elaborated above, I agree with the statement that because most environmental problems are too complicated, individuals can do nothing about them on their own.
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