▶ Your Answer :
In the reading
passage, there is ample support for the author's claim that adding more tax on
tobacco has several advantages. On the other hand, the lecturer brings up some
points that contradict this argument. to contradict this argument
First, the professor insists that raising a
tax on cigarettes makes youth to get get (make뒤에는 동사 원형이 나와야 합니다) their tobacco more
in the black market. Even though the cigarettes prices rise, they can buy it
cheaper and easier way from there. This is proved by a recent study. This casts
doubt on the reading passage's assertion that the younger cannot afford the
higher price of cigarettes and will stop smoking. young people cannot afford the higher price of cigarettes so they will stop smoking
Next, the professor contends that the
government will not earn taxes enough to invest
their environment. They cannot make additional benefit from it, because a
higher tax leads to decrease the tobacco sale.
This counters the reading passage's claim that the government can improve the
environmental harm caused by tobacco farms to use their supplementary tax.
Finally, the professor argues that tobacco
business creates a lot of jobs. There were various jobs related cigarettes such as agricultural, manufacture, and retailer works. Thus,
decreasing tobacco consumption that caused its higher price makes less occupations and more poverty. This refutes the
reading passage's suggestion that extra revenue
can be used to reduce poverty.
점수: 23 리딩에 대한 정보가 많이 부족한 통합형 에세이입니다. 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요한 부분을 차지하는 것은 한 주제에 대하여서 서로 다른 정보를 가지고 있는 리딩과 리스닝이 어떻게 비교하고 반박을 하는 것인지를 보는 것 입니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우에 있어서는 리딩에 대한 부분을 각 단락에서 한 문장으로 만 서술하였는데. 한 문장으로 끝내는 것 보다는 리스닝을 좀 더 반박할 수 있는 부분들을 더 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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