Basically a single world culture can be a type of globalization. Based on this assumption, I agree with the statement that modern technology is facilitating the world unification. Even though the phenomenon of globalization has steadily progressed from the beginning of this century, the development of technology, especially such as computers and Internet, is playing a significant role in creating a single world culture. In this essay, I am going to present how the world is getting unified with a single object (Single Object에 대한 이야기는 없어요. 뭔가 refer 될만한 내용을 적어주시거나 이 부분을 안쓰는 게 좋을 것 같아요).
Above all things, nowadays, more and more people in the world are creating a single culture by living under a universal language: English. With the development of modern technology, computers, the population speaking English language is increasing. The various kinds of languages spoken in different countries have been giving a way to the lingua franca, English. The most common computer language or software packages used today or software packages are written with in English language. Almost all of computers are using a keyboard with Roman alphabet letter. No matter where you are and no matter (생략가능) which language you speak, we are using the same kind of software like Window Operating System. It means that we are getting into a single group.
In addition, our life style is getting unified with each passing day with as a modern technology of Internet being used in almost every corner of the world. All sorts of information that we get are getting provide us with a unifying worldwide knowledge worldwide. The similar kinds of internet pages such as Google, MS Explorer make us getting closer to one another. Besides, those portal web sites have same faces (similarly designed website page 라고 하는 게 좋을 것 같아요) all over the country. Wherever you live, we see the same images on the first pages and share our ideas based on the world-wide websites.
Moreover, people all over the world are creating a single family through the Internet Face book. Each one is getting closer and closer beyond national borders and distances.
In summary, the modern technology, especially such as computers and Internet development, brings worldwide people worldwide together, and making the world to be getting a single culture.
전반적으로 문법적으로 크게 손볼 곳은 없는 것 같아요. 하지만 다시한번 proof reading을 할 때 자잘한 문법적 실수를 확인하면서 읽어주시는 것이 좋을 것 같아요. 내용적인 측면에서 보면 글의 흐름은 좋은 것 같아요. 하지만 첫 문장에 unifying을 globalization으로 define 하셨으니까 globalization 쪽으로 focus를 좀 더 두면서 썼으면 더 좋을 것 같아요.