■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : It is more important for students to understand idea and concepts than it is for them to learn facts. |
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▶ Your Answer : Some people believe that it is more important for students to learn facts. There are obviously many opinions regarding this topic, but it is clear that understanding principles is more beneficial. The concepts of score and application in life clearly show this theme.
First of all, understanding concepts is the best way to get good grade when it comes to mathematics. In mathematics, there are many problems stemmed from one principle. Many students tried to remind only a solution without figuring out concepts and could not solve on time. Those got worse grade than students understanding concepts got. For example, when I was in high school, I was in the middle term. In this period, I should studied in mathematics and study with my friend who is likely to remember answer but not concept. He always suggested me to record only answer. However, I was not good at reminding answer and studied principle of problem. Consequently, we took the mathematics exam. I got a better grade than he got in mathematics, which made me enter a university with scholarship. If I followed his style in that moment, I could have gotten scholarship.
In addition, principles improve us more creative. Everyone knows some facts but it is very difficult to apply in life. This is mainly because there is no akin subjective to apply in reality when you need something. For instance, my brother, a captain in military camp, went camping with me on riverside. We brought some food required to fire and was about to set a fire in order to cook. My brother and I recognized that we forgot to bring a lighter. However, my brother made fire using plastic bag with water. He told me that water lens can concentrate sunlight such like glasses. He also claimed to me that obsession with setting a fire only by reflecting lense would not let me apply in appropriate time. (너무 사례 위주입니다)
In conclusion, it seems to me that focusing on basic principle is more beneficial. The example of score and creativity support the argument.
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1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
2. conclusion의 분량을 3문장 이상으로 늘려주세요.
3. 문장력이 조금 불안정한 편입니다.
문장 단위로 영작 연습을 자주 해주세요.
4. 전체적으로 example 위주인 느낌이 강합니다.
statement의 비율을 늘려주세요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*