■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : Do
you agree or disagree that technology progress is always good? Use specific
reasons and examples to support your answer.
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▶ Your Answer : ㅜ Our society is now facing technological
progress. However, there is an intensive divisive issue as to whether
technology advancement is always good or not. Some might support that
technology progress is always good. However, one may not be so short-sighted
and must consider the other side of the coin. According to my rationale,
technological progress is not always good. Numerous rationalities will be
scrutinized in order to support the claim. The
most prominent reason must be that technology advancement can increase the
unemployment rate which leads to economic recession. As the technology
progresses, works done by humans no longer need humans. With a little bit of
manipulation, people can manufacture enormous amount of products. Employers do
not need lots of people to make products. They just need a small amount of
people who can control the machines. This can increase the number of unemployed
people which leads to economic depression. One of the phone manufacturing
companies in Korea, Samsung, (컴마 필요) might serve as a good example. In the past, they
needed countless people because there were no machines and people had to make phones
by hand. However, after the advent of machines, there was no need to employ
such great number of people as Samsung need just a few people who can control
the machines. Consequently, they fired 3/4 of the employees and they are all
unemployed. The unemployed wanted to find other jobs but they cannot because
other companies were also using machines. Thus, the unemployed had no profit which
means that they should spend less money. As there were little money in the
market, there was no great advancement of the society.
Another
claim which should be mentioned is that people cannot remember trivial events
or numbers as they are living in technologically advanced society.
Technological advancement leads to better memory of the digital tool. There are
lots of devices used to record events or trivial things such as cellphones and
laptops, computers etc. With these devices, people do not need to memorize all
the upcoming incident or number such as birthdays or phone numbers. My mother,
who did not use cellphone during her earlier life, needed to remember all the
phone numbers and birthdays of her friends'. Of course she had a note to write
them down but as she constantly saw them, she was able to remember them.
However, recently, she did not even know my brother's phone number because when
she wrote his name on the cellphone, his number appeared on the screen and she
could immediately call him without watching the numbers.
Founded
on the reasoning mentioned above, technology advancement is not always good.
Those two reasons are compelling enough to support the claim; the increase of
unemployment rate and the decrease of the ability to remember simple things. Thus,
nothing in my mind regarding this issue overweighs the idea stated above. |
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