■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic :Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, email, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. |
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▶ Your Answer : Human beings have developed variety means of communication system to propagate information to the others. The primordial method (단복수) is face-to-face communication, devised since people are able to speak their languages. (이 문장이 말하고자 하는 바가 무엇인지 모르겠습니다. 사람들이 말을 할 줄 알아서 대면 소통을 한다는건가요?) Some people think that this type of interaction is still the most useful system due to swiftness and simplicity. However, in my opinion, I think the other types of communication methods, such as letter or email is better for the following two reasons. To begin with, it is available for people to get involved in communication in more convenient manner with e-mail service. To implement face-to-face conversation, people had to meet their partner in person to present their ideas, demanding them to spend a lot of time and exertion. On the contrary, people are able to have conversations whenever they want regardless of the location with the other communication methods. To be specific, when I was an elementary school student, I had to be in same location as my friends because there were no other options for us to mingle with. It disturbed us with the precise time and locations since it was hard to coordinate each other circumstances (무슨 뜻인가요?). However, when I learned about the Internet-based mail program, I could easily send my message to my friend without spatiotemporal conditions. On top of that, people can include more precise information on their message. While they are talking to each other in person, it is possible for them to ignore the important messages on their conversation. In comparison to face-to-face communication, letters or e-mails endow more extensive time for people to contemplate about their messages and they can be more aware of what they mentioned and listened to about. For instance, when I worked with the colleagues from a foreign country, I had to speak in English to cooperate with him. English was a foreign language for both of us and the critical problems occurred sporadically. One day, we had to make decision about a vital contract between two countries. However, even though we had agreed upon all of the requirements and provisions for the projects, my counter partner changed his mind unexpectedly. (적절하지 않은 예시입니다. 이것이 어떻게 소통수단과 관련이 있지요? 파트너가 갑자기 마음을 바꾼 것 아닌가요? 만약 이 예시가 validate되려면 topic sentence에 leave evidence, record evidence등이 나와야합니다. precise는 정확한 이라는 뜻이므로 논리가 성립되지 않습니다. 기록하는 이유라고 명시해주세요.) The discord became irrevocable and my boss told me that I should communicate with him through other types of communication methods, such as e-mail to record the evidence (s가 올 수 없는 불가산명사입니다) correctly. To sum up, people can participate in the social activity with more straightforward ways. They can overcome the drawbacks of direct conversation by harnessing electronic mailing services. Also, they can become more clear and minimize the contradictions derived from spoken messages. The written contents consist of more exact meanings and it is always recorded. In this regard, I strongly believe that people should utilize different concept of communications. |
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단어 사용에 있어서 오류가 많이 보입니다.
communication은 소통이고
뒤에 methods가 붙어야만 수단이라는 뜻을 포함하게 됩니다.
topic sentence에서 그 문단의 모든 내용을 포괄할 수 있게 잘 정리해주세요!
수고하셨습니다. *^^*