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연어님이 알려주신 것 반영해 보려고 많이 노력했는데...잘 모르겠어요..ㅠ 논리구성 간단히 하고, 이렇다 왜 이렇지?-니까 이런것 넣고 예시도 수정하고..신경썼는데 자신이 없네요...ㅠㅠㅠ글이 점점 길어져요;;;;ㅠ Some people do not think that people were kinder in the past than today. However, in my opinion, people in the past are more nicer than people these days for two reasons : to practical assistance and to learn the value of life lessons. To begin with, unlike these days, people in the past allows ordinary people to practical assistance. This is because, they can help others owing to have kindness when ordinary people who have in troubles. In contrast, people nowadays who live in individual and frosty society do not need to intervene other’s problem and do not help them. For example, I learned much from my senior employees when I first started working at a motor company. The senior employees in my department taught me many important work skills, such as how to create effective presentations and how to safely handle the machinery in the lab. They helped me greatly and thanks to them, and I was able to acclimate easily to the workplace. However, I think that this story was possible to happen that time, because it occurred ten years ago. Whereas today’s company, if people do not know their own work and awkward their assignments, they must be fired presently since there are so many people who hope to work in that office in our society. 실질적 도움을 받는다 : past people 친절하다-> 모르는 것 잘 알려준다-> 회사에서 많은 도움을 받았다(ex. 회사에서 도움받는 일)-> 오늘날이었으면 도움받기 힘들었다, 이유: 미취업자들과 사회분위기 On top of that, compared to today, former people plays a significant role in learning the value of life lessons for normal people. This is due to the fact that previous people generally have a good-minded in that they thought others as if their own family because they believed a certain presence of truly warm bone. Also, they were always worried about other people’s problems. For instance, after failing multiple times to pass the exam to become an English teacher, my sister became extremely discouraged. And, people who lived in next doors advised her to continue to study and try to pass the examination again even though we didn't know each others very well. To encourage her to stick with her goal, they told her stories of how they overcame failures in their own lives. Because of their advice, she rose to the challenge, and passed her exam, and finally became a teacher last year. Generally speaking, if she were to prepare her exam today, she would be discouraged more because people these days do not interested others’ problem sincerely because this rivery society makes people some of the sad beast which only to require to concern their own safety. 인생의 교훈을 얻는다-> past people 친절하다-> 가족처럼 챙겨주고, 고민이 있을 때 조언을 해준다-> ex. sister->오늘날이었으면 있을 수 없는 일, 이유: 경쟁적인 사회 분위기, 다른 사람 일에 관심 없는 사회 To sum up, people in the past have a better mind like angles than today’s people. This is attributed to the fact that they can be able to practical help as well as valuable life lessons in comfortable atmosphere of society unlike today. In this regard, I strongly agree with the statement that people were friendlier in the past than today for the reasons I mentioned above. |