Both the reading and the lecture hold different positions, respectively, on the issue of waking up early in the morning. The lecture’s argument is formed around many points that are in direct contrast to the material in the reading passage. Firstly, according to the reading, being “early birds” is beneficial, since people can manage their time in constructive way. If people rise up 2 hours earlier, they are able to enhance the quality of their life by relaxing or training some useful skills. On the other hand, the professor disputes this idea. He argues that waking up early makes people go to bed early, so people can not gain enough time to improve the quality of their life. Also, it would harm health and make people sick. ( 접속사 좋습니다 ! ) Secondly, the reading indicates that (good)the morning is the most productive hours. It is because people are not distracted by noise or other people in the morning. Contrary to this statement, the professor asserts that individuals have their own natural rhythm which is determined by genes. Therefore, foring "nigt owls" to be "early birds" might make "night owls" feel exhausted and tired all day. In conclusion, the professor mentions some finding show that human needs a certain amount of time to sleep every day. This is contrary to the argument of the reading, which says that being “early birds” is advantageous for everyone. ( very good ! )
주요 채점기준 (항목별 5-4-3-2-1점수로 30점 만점 자가채점) 논제 파악 effectiveness in addressing the task 적절한 설명 appropriate explanation 적절한 예증, 구체적 설명 appropriate exemplification, details 일관성, 단계적 구성, 주제와의 연관성 unity, progression, coherence 다양한 단어 구사 syntactic variety 적절한 단어 선택, 관용적 표현 word choice, idiomaticity Writing 0–30 score scale Good (26-30)
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