▶ Your Answer :
We make conversations everyday, and there
must be sometimes to make mistakes in which we often make mistakes. In this situation, the second option looks
best because of the subsequent two reasons. for the following two subsequent reasons (따라서 주제가 무엇인가요? 주제 자체가 언급이 되지 않았습니다)
To start with, the speaker should know what
he said wrong not to lose his trust in future speech. In addition, it is always
good to revise the mistakes when it is possible (이유에 대한 구체적 설명을 하고 난 후에 예시로 넘어가시길 바랍니다). For instance, I did a group
project last month with my co-worker. There was an issue about how to improve
current investment procedure in R&D center. While we were discussing about
the solution, the leader of our project used incorrect words repeatedly. I knew
what he was meant to say, but the pronunciation he made was slightly different
from the real one. However, nobody told him the fact, and he spoke the word in
a same way in front of his team leader. Just because of this, his team leader
began to think that the project leader might not know about the issue exactly.
In this regard, I don't think the third option, say nothing, is desirable.
On the other hand, to interrupt and correct
the mistake instantly might hurt the speakers' minds. Since all people want to be respected, they
don't want to be attacked in front of many people do not want to be attacked (독립형 에세이에서는 줄인말을 서술하면 안됩니다). For example, in the past, I
sometimes gave feedback to correct some mistakes made by meeting leaders.
Although the purpose was to purely revise incorrect information, they felt like
I was attacking him. As a result, they also tried to attack me when I tried to
speak my opinions. At first, I didn't know why they were attacking me, but
after private talks, I realized that I was doing something wrong.
In summation, when leader says something
incorrect, I prefer to talk to him after meeting is over. This would help them
to be more trustful in future speech, and also make them feel respected.
점수; 22 두 가지 부분에 있어서 오류가 존재하는 독립형 에세이입니다. 첫 번째 오류는 명확한 주제 언급이 나오지 않았습니다. 주제가 명확하게 언급 되어있지 않았기 때문에 인트로 부터 무엇을 말하려고 하는 것인지 모르겠습니다. 두 번째는 이유에 대한 구체적 설명이 많이 부족합니다. 바로 예시로 넘어가는 것 보다는 이유를 좀 더 구체적으로 설명하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |