■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic :
Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting.
The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect. In your opinion,
which of the following is the best thing to do? 1. Interrupt and correct the
mistake right away; 2. Wait until the class or meeting is over and the people
are gone, and then talk to the teacher or meeting leader; 3. Say nothing.
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▶ Your Answer :
When people are told that they are wrong by instructor,
or leader, each of them has different reactions, such as asking question right
away, or just ignoring it. However, in my opinion, it is better to wait until the
class or meeting is over and the people are gone, and then talk to teacher or
meeting leader.
To
begin with, students should not be annoying to other people in the same room.
Interrupting class by asking question during on-going stage will be so disgraceful
that other student will not be able to focus on their study. Staying polite in
the classroom is also important since it is shared by other people. For example,
when I was a sophomore at university, there was one student who was (주어 동사 불일치) participating in class actively and present a lot. His overall performance was
great but he was too passionate, asking question during the lecture often. Other
students had to wait until his question and explanation by professor were over, which was (시제) time consuming. Also, the progress of lecture was far beyond the plan, generating
a host of petitions made by other students. Therefore, the professor set the
class policy that students can ask questions (단수/복수) only after the lecture.
On
top of that, students can get better responses from their teacher or leader.
Asking question after class without other students will provide them with more
time to think about the matter. It will also be a (관사) great chance to interact (품사) with their mentors, showing positive images that students participate with
enthusiasm. For instance, I happened to decide to ask questions to professor after
class because I noticed that I could not get elaborate answers if I was asked of them
spontaneously. Professor was able to give me intricate answers and I sometimes
passed to me useful documents. (2nd body paragraph가 많이 빈약한 편입니다. 디테일을 더욱 늘려주시면 좋을 거 같습니다.)
To
sum up, people should express as best manner as possible when they are with
others in one area and they can better outcomes from their instructor. In this
regard, I think it is better for people to wait to over the class and ask later
when they got unexpected incorrect message.
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1. comma를 너무 자주 쓰시는 경향이 있습니다.
문장은 최대한 짧고 간결하게 유지해주세요!
2. 사소한 문법 오류가 잦은 편입니다.
proof reading을 통해서 실수를 줄여주시면 좋을 거 같습니다.
3. conclusion의 first sentence는 너무 난해합니다.
토픽을 위주로 간단하게 써주세요.