■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : Do you agree that it is easier to become an educated person than it was in the past? |
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▶ Your Answer : Ultimately, there is no right or wrong. However, the one thing that is definite is that with a robust claim and apropos set of evidence, anyone can acknowledge the validity of an argument. Today, I have produced a claim about "it is easier to become an educated person than it was in the past" and effectively bolstered it with two specific reasoning. I have thus effectively built a solid assertion where not everyone would agree to, but definitely acknowledge. To begin with, thanks to advanced technologies, it is easier to become an educated person than it was in the past. Some people have dedicated their lives to developing the novel techniques so there are many ways to utilize when people learn. To use easier and more effective methods while people study, more people can be educated than people in the past. Previously, there was only one method, reading books, however, nowadays, there are many ways to study such as watching the videos or animations. When I was in high school, I was bad at chemistry. I could not grasp all theories in the chemistry hard-covered books. Thus, I watched the related animation to understand the chemical reactions. It showed visual changes, and I could totally understand it. Not only that, I was fascinated about this subject, so I got great grades on final test. Due to the visual resources, I could learn more effectively. Consequently, many people will learn more easily and effectively through these latest technologies than previous. In addition, as time goes by more information will be added so students nowadays have more sources to learn. Also, the teachers have enhanced skills to teach so these are beneficial for people. For instance, my English teacher has taught TOEIC for about 20 years so he has a great deal of skills and information to teach. Thanks to the piled sources, I was able to learn easily because teacher knew what most students have difficulties in understanding. Plus, he collected all previous inclination of TOEIC tests. These helped me increase my English skills, and I got great grades on TOEIC test. He said that the information and teaching skills were limited in the past but, these previous experiments became helpful resources to him. Ultimately, there is no right or wrong. However, the one thing that is definite is that with a robust claim and apropos set of evidence, anyone can acknowledge the validity of an argument. Today, I have produced a claim about "it is easier to become an educated person than it was in the past" and effectively bolstered it with two specific reasoning. I have thus effectively built a solid assertion where not everyone would agree with, but definitely acknowledge. |
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오프토픽인지 확인부탁드립니다.
15점 만점에 점수와 어느부분을 향상시켜야하는지 알려주시면 너무 감사하겠습니다.
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1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
2. 철자 오류가 잦은 편입니다. 심한 감점의 요인이 될 수 있으니, 에세이 작성을 마치시고 꼼꼼히 검토해주세요.
+) 단어를 외우실 때 스펠링을 집중적으로 외워주세요.
3. 두 바디 모두 development of technology에 기인합니다.
비슷하게 느껴지지 않게끔 확실히 차별화해주세요!
수고하셨습니다. *^^*