■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : We all face challenges in our lives. When you are dealing with a serious problem in your life what do you feel is the best way to handle it? Asking someone with more experience for advice. Looking for potential solutions using the Internet. Taking a long time to think about the problem. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. Do not use memorized examples. |
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▶ Your Answer : We always confront hardships in our lives whether we want or not. Therefore, it is important to cope with these hurdles in the way of our own way. I personally believe that asking an experienced person for help is the best way to handle the problems. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay. The empirical advices from the seniors will guide us to the place where we can get out of this ugly situations. No matter where we go, there are always those who already had underwent the situation in which we are now struggling with. They, therefore, must have their own way to break through that circumstance, and these practical experiences will help us to set our way of lives. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Last year, I wondered if I should keep studying my major or not. So I asked one senior of my major to meet me and she gave me a ton of consultations. Apparently, she went through the same situation as mine when she was in my age too. However, she overcame it by taking a break for a while and experiencing other things she had ever wanted to do. Eventually, I got a motivation after that meeting, because now I can see what I am (줄임말 사용을 지양해주세요. 그리고 그 what이 무엇인지도 함께 설명해주세요!) going to do next. It would not be possible without the help of that senior. Moreover, we are going to be able to broaden or fix our perspective looking on the problems. If we are focusing too much on the same obstacles repetitively, the range of our thoughts would be contracted and pinned at only one viewpoint. However, by listening to other peoples’ advices, it will allow us to widen the point of view and eventually change it in a positive way. For example, if I continuously get bad grades in all subjects for a semester, I would be so disappointed to myself that I might think the only way to solve this failure is to quit the university. However, someone such as a professor who has been seeing lots of students like me can tell me that by taking one more extra semester, I can recover that failed GPA. Then, I will be able to think in a different way which would change my action in the next step, otherwise I would have been stuck in my previous consideration. Likewise, gaining advices from experienced one would influence me to have better choice for the future. In conclusion, I strongly believe that getting advices from experienced people is the best option to deal with struggles. This is because they would guide and set our lives’ path in a more sophisticated way and the advice from them could change our behavior in a good way, too. |
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464words, 25m writing, 5m revising 했습니다!
예상 점수도 알려주시면 감사하겠습니다.
잘 부탁드립니다! 수고하세요!
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점수: 12/15
1. 각 문단 시작 전에 tab 버튼 눌러서 들여쓰기 해주세요.
2. advice는 불가산명사이므로 뒤에 s를 붙일 수 없습니다.
수정해주세요!
3. 두 가지 이유가 비슷하게 느껴집니다.
서로 같은 말이 반복되지 않도록 차별점을 확실히 해주세요!
수고하셨습니다. *^^*