There is
an argument over whether people should spend their money on traveling rather
than saving for the future. Some people believe that people need to save for
the future as they can do diverse things in the future. My view, however, is
that people should spend their money (on) going
to another countries. There is
largely because people have the opportunity to learn a sense of responsibility
and independence. Moreover, they can make
(meet) so many
diverse people of many backgrounds.
To begin
with, people have the chance to learn responsibility and independence by
traveling. People adapt to environment by themselves. Also, they can
respectively spend their money (on) eating,
transporting(ation),
and visiting the sites. By doing so, they decide
(come up with) their schedule on their own. (You tried to cram too many points in limited space, making
it less organized) For example, I was vacation on last year in
Hong-Kong. When airplane landed on
there, it was (on) 11pm. Because I was alone, I couldn’t provide (get) any
help. I was concerned about this situation and felt anxiety
(anxious). But I asked foreign people to give
some advice to recommend living for days. (I don’t get
this part. You need to either further describe your situation or simplify the
example.) When I arrived to my dormitory, I felt a sense of independence
and responsibility.
Furthermore,
people make new friends living in all
over the countries (world). By travelling, people can experience (find out
that) it is no problem to communicate with foreign people. Suppose you
are traveling Spain. But you don’t speak Spanish completely. However, people
who are (at) the same age can help you to go (to the) right place. By doing so, you have the
opportunity to make new friends. Also, it is probable that someone invite(s) you to inform their
families (their home).
To
summarize, people should spend their money (on)
traveling all over the world considering that there is the chance to learn a
sense of responsibility and independence and people make a lot of people (friends)
who (are) living (in)
another countries. Of course, saving
their money can be beneficial to live your life
enjoyable(y)
in their nation. But, they didn’t
know the fact that it is small part of the world that they do live in. There
will be no regret that I spent too much money on traveling. It was the
traveling that can give (you) your life
enjoyable.